jen
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Post by jen on Nov 15, 2004 11:46:40 GMT -5
I am the infamous crazy animal-woman, crouching outside her ex- lover’s window with a rusting ax, screaming raw: “We were meant to be, don’t you understand?” Hair knotted, frosted gray with dust from rummaging through the backyard tool shed in search of the most convincing sharp object; as if bludgeoning his head into a mangled bloody mass might woo him like a rose gently placed across a love poem on the kitchen table. I am this beast - I will wrench out his heart with garden shears just to plop it on his breakfast plate and show him his undying love so that he will gasp only truth for his Very Last Breath *** anyone who doesn't know why this is convtroversial shouldn't ask. opinions, anyone? (steve?) (edit: if you highlight that smiley, it looks like an evil chinese blob. i'm frighened.)
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Post by steve on Nov 16, 2004 9:30:57 GMT -5
i don't like the we were meant to be part, in a very originally done piece it stands out to be extremely cliche. a sharp object really wouldn't bludgeon some one would it? i don't like 'plop'. other than that i like it a lot. it was like, "Yeah, i am a female writer, AND i'll admit to being completely obsessed." it rocked. Kudos.
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